Nowadays men sport is given far more attention in the society than women sport. What are the reasons? Do you think is it a positive or negative situation?

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sport
is gaining more attraction among societies,
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essay discusses the causality impacts of
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issue and
also
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think is totally a negative situation.
This
is sad but true that sports and rigorous exercise
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always been related to
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men
, muscularity and power since ancient days.
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in ancient Greece and prehistoric cultures, most of the gods,
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related to power all have been
men
who defeated their enemies and they were mostly engaged in sports and competitions. More importantly, these strong
mankinds
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mankind
gained their power by doing exercise
while
their wife took the whole responsibility of upbringing their children and used to stay at home.
Consequently
, the concept of physical activities has
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positive correlation with
men
since
ald
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old
days. I reckon
this
concept is faulty and believe it is a negative situation. To clarify the idea
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the exact meaning of gender discrimination
while
women have always fought for their primitive
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against gender biases and
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behaviors
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they
are deserve
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to gain more attention and
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.
For instance
,
sport
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events have the potential ability to provide a good opportunity for women to show off their potential strong in a relatively healthy environment.
To conclude
, the stereotype behind the
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perception
reception
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perceive muscularity and
sport
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activities are totally connected is the reason why people pay more attention to
men
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men's
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sport
.
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