In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that it is the government's responsibility. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Write an essay with no less than 250 words.

The sugar
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and oily products are the real culprits causing overweight and social media for
unhealth
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unhealthy
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lifestyle
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lifestyles
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among children. In many countries,
public
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the public
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blame
government
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the government
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for not controlling and
interviening
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intervening
interviewing
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situation. But should the
government
be responsible for people's own
choice
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? I strongly disagree with
this
opinion. In
this
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we will discuss the reasons why kid's
being
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overweight and
leading
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lead
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an unhealthy life and actions justifying the
government
in controlling the situation. First and foremost, one of the reasons is consuming sugary and oily -
the
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junk food, which leads to
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a lot
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of fatty molecules not
absorbed
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by the body,
hence
high fat
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high-fat
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content. On
the
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top of that, social media has trapped innocent kids glued to their
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, stopping any physical activities.
Hence
leading to
unhealthy
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an unhealthy
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lifestyle
. It should be
parent's
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the parent's
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responsibility to monitor their kids and educate them
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importance of eating healthy and staying fit.
For instance
, parents should timebox
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time spend on social media and encourage outdoor physical activities.
Secondly
, the
government
is doing its job by mandating all products to have food composition published on the package.
For example
, the percentage of fat and nutrition any product contains.
Also
, it's
individual
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an individual
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choice to consume what they want.
In addition
, a lot of parks and cycling tracks are constructed by the city for its people and
special
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a special
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kid-zone
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kid zone
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for children, encouraging them to enjoy outdoor activities. In conclusion, we have succinctly described the actions taken by
government
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the government
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in promoting
healthy
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a healthy
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lifestyle
and mandating products to have detailed composition distribution mentioned on the package. Nothing more can't be expected
for
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the
government
and parents should step up to monitor their kids.
Hence
I completely disagree with people's opinion pushing all the blame on the
government
for overweight and unhealthy
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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in children.
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