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The intrnet has brought sea change in the way inforamtion is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems that did not exist before. what are the most serious problems linked to the internet and what solutions can you suggest?

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The internet has brought significant changes in
distribution
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 and utilization way of data, but it has
also
leads
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 to issues that had not
seen
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 in advance.
This
 essay will discuss the problems associated with using technological devices and offer certain remedies which can help
people
 to be aware
about
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 seeing dangers. To introduce, in a current day
scenario
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 the internet has revolutionized our life in
a
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apply
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various ways. It is clearly seen that
,
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people
 who spend lots of time in front of
computer
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the computer
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,
exposed
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 to be obese because of the lack of movement. Especially, children play
video-games
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video games
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 almost all day.
Moreover
, it can
leads
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 to isolation as well.
Although
, social media, as a kind of new technology, supports communication between
people
 from all over the world,
as well as
it
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prevents face-to-face communication.
For instance
, based on a recent survey,
the
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 number of individuals, especially teenagers refuse to communicate with their peers, families and others. To tackle
with
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these problems,
people
 should help each other, as it is
important
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an important
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 factor to minimize concern.
Firstly
, family members may encourage each other to do sport
instead
 of spending time with computer technologies.
On the other hand
,
government
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the government
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 may organize festivals, events or other kinds of
celebration
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celebrations
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 which provide humankind with
the
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a
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 sense of community. In a nutshell, overusing
of
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social networking can be harmful
both
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to both
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 physical and mental health,
however
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,however
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 community can prevent
he
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the
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 challenges
with
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in
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 suitable ways.
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