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Fossil fuels (coal, oil, natural gas) are the main sources in many countries , but in some countries the use of alternative sources of energy (wind energy and solar energy) is encouraged. To what extent do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Fossil
fuels
 like coal, oil, and natural gas make up the majority of the
energy
 source in many nations, but alternative
energy
sources
 like
wind
 and solar should grow in their opposite. From my perspective,
this
 resource evolution has negative repercussions on both the environment and the economy. Positive aspects of
sources
 other than fossil
fuels
 include a number of advantages. First off, as
wind
 and sunshine are essentially necessary elements in nature, any technology, machinery, or vehicles made from them will be completely eco-friendly because no harmful gases or compounds will be released. Other vehicles that use petrol or oil for regular transportation,
however
, will be deleterious to our health and marine life.
For instance
, every year a tonne of dead fish goes up on several Vietnamese coastlines
as a result
 of excessive oil use by ships and boats,
while
 no comparable effects are noted for
wind
 turbines or solar
energy
 companies.
On the other hand
, neither of these
sources
 will ultimately be beneficial to the environment. Despite how much
wind
 and solar
energy
 can help protect the environment, if businesses become overly dependent on it, productivity may suffer. Because solar
energy
 is only active during the day and
wind
 is not always consistent in its frequency of appearance or its strength, neither factor can reliably ensure the supply of persistent capacity.
In contrast
, fossil
fuels
 must not be ignored in manufacturing because they are more effective when nature's resources associated with them are plentiful. Taking everything into account, switching from fossil
fuels
 to other alternative
sources
 of
energy
 might have both advantages and disadvantages. It is preferable to employ them all effectively as complements without overusing them, which will lead to cost-effective manufacturing with minimal negative environmental impacts.
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