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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, ltaly and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, ltaly and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph gives information about the amount of
carbon
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dioxide
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 in
tonnes
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 that was emitted by
people
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 in The United
Kingdom
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,
Sweden
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, Italy and Portugal per person in the years between 1967 and 2007.
Overall
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,
Sweden
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 and The United
Kingdom
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 produced the most
Carbon
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dioxide
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 in the year 1967 decreased the amount of
carbon
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dioxide
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 in 2007.
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people
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 in Italy and Portugal created the least
carbon
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dioxide
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 in 1967 trended to rise up in 2007. In the year 1967,slightly over one ton of
Carbon
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dioxide
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 creation by the population in Portugal
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 the vast majority of
carbon
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dioxide
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 which was around ten
tonnes
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 was come from
people
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 who live in The United
Kingdom
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. Ten years later in 1977, the
carbon
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dioxide
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 in
Sweden
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, Italy and Portugal significantly increased to slightly above 10
tonnes
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, 6
tonnes
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 and 2
tonnes
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 respectively.
In contrast
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The United
Kingdom
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 remained stable at approximately 11
tonnes
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. From 1977 to 2007, 6
tonnes
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 of
carbon
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dioxide
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 were reduced by
people
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 in
Sweden
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 and around 2
tonnes
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 by residents in The United
Kingdom
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words carbon, dioxide, tonnes, people, kingdom, sweden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • CO2 emissions
  • per capita
  • decline
  • increase
  • trend
  • comparison
  • industrial growth
  • economic development
  • green energy
  • environmental policy
  • Kyoto Protocol
  • EU regulations
  • technological advancement
  • population growth
  • international agreements
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