Should long-term job seekers in receipt of government benefits be made to do voluntary work so that they give something back to the community? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Moving with the times, unemployment has been normalised thanks to the financial aid the government has offered. Relying on
authorities
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generosity, these
people
are associated with a pain in the neck of the local administration's funds.
Firstly
, not all
people
enjoy their
job
however
, they tend to go to work ignoring the disrespect, tiredness and
the
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low
pay-check
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. Now that employees have their own party and association, in society they can request their own rights
therefore
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, creating adequate conditions during shifts. There is no need to be unemployed for a long period of time.
For instance
,
a
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data made in
US
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shows that almost 45%
out
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of
job
seekers don't actually search for a
job
hence
, they wait for support. Not only
they
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drawback the economy, but they
also
stagnate it by requesting social
aids
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.
On the other hand
,
government
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needs to think up in what ways should the unemployed
people
be exploited
therefore
, voluntary work has the answer. Voluntary work needs to cover all the working fields
therefore
, adjusting it to the
people
's references of their past jobs,
the
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society can rely on the volunteers that their
job
is done by
profesionals
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professionals
.
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instance
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if an ex-gardener can't find a
job
, authorities can
enroll
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him in being
responsable
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responsible
of
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the local park.
To conclude
, the main idea
suggest
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that long-term
job
seekers need to be used in
a
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adequate way to
combate
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combat
the economic drawback caused by them. Each individual needs to record
a
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progress in
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the enviorment's
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enviorment's
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environments
environment's
well-being.
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