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Band 6

You saw an advert in the newspaper asking for volunteers to help run a charity event. Write a letter of application to the organisers. In your letter:  Explain why you are interest in helping  Give details suitable past experience  Suggest ways you might help with the event

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Dear Sir or Madam My first complaint is the event would like volunteers to help and it would be great if you could.Our street people and my friends
also
 want to help as volunteers. They were prevented from doing so
last
year
.Many were dissatisfied with
this
.Because the charity had already ordered a special service.But we hope that will not be the case
this
year
.
Secondly
, 2 years ago, it was the most amazing charity event of the
year
.We hope it will be the same
this
year
. I would appreciate it if you could inform me as soon as possible. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely Lucas Moura
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Task Achievement
Ensure the letter includes a proper introduction that relates directly to the prompt provided. Begin by mentioning the advert and your desire to apply as a volunteer.
Task Achievement
Include specific details about why you are interested in helping with the charity event. Discuss your motivation and any personal connections to the cause.
Task Achievement
Discuss previous experiences in a way that aligns with the requirements of the volunteer position advertised. Mention any relevant skills or previous volunteer work.
Task Achievement
Provide suggestions on how you could contribute to the event. Offer concrete ideas that demonstrate your enthusiasm and suitability for the role.
Coherence and Cohesion
Maintain a clear logical structure throughout your letter. Use paragraphs effectively, each one dealing with a particular point or idea.
Coherence and Cohesion
Begin with a formal greeting and end with a suitable closing for a formal letter. You've used 'Dear Sir or Madam' correctly, but ensure your farewell is consistent throughout.
Coherence and Cohesion
The content of each paragraph should be clear and relate to the points mentioned in the prompt. Currently, the ideas are a bit scattered and do not clearly connect back to the task at hand.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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