Write about the following topic: Should long-term job seekers in receipt of government benefits be made to do voluntary work so that they give something back to the community? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, in many countries are a lot of
people
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, who have
not
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no
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job. They take some charity from
government
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the government
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and doles. They could stay without
work
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for a long time and receive
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this
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these
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benefits without
simple
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simply
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working. Scientists say, that around two hundred
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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people
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now are unemployed.
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with, some of these
people
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would not like to find
a
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work
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work
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. They do not care about
this
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, but simple worker pays taxes, which are going to doles for
jobless
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the jobless
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. At
this
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poin
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point
, we could say that unemployed
people
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need to make
a
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apply
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voluntary
work
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for their towns or
countrysides
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countryside
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.
Then
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,
government
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the government
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need to organize
this
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voluntary
work
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around the cities.
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, cleaning streets, helping old
people
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or organizing some holidays.
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, often we could not know, what is the reason
of
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for
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his
non working
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non-working
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. In my experience, I visited many
people
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, who have many misfortune events in
nearest
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the nearest
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time.
After
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this
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these
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actions,
people
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could have depressive feelings.
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this
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, I think a little bit of relaxing time without working will be better. In
this
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case,
government
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the government
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should offer
this
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voluntary
work
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.
Also
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, many
of
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apply
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jobless
people
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are invalids or with some sores. In
this
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way,
unemployed
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the unemployed
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could
refusal
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refuse
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in voluntary
work
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.
As a result
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, our community needs a good department, which will
solves
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solve
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questions about seekers. In my opinion, seekers need to do some
work
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for the community. Many of them do not find a job only take a relaxing part with some additional doles. But
person
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a person
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, who does not
work
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live
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lives
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boringly and
lazyly
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lazily
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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