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All high school students should be encouraged to take part in community service programmes. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#school #students #part #community #service #programmes
I
to be
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 about to learn in the
MGIMO
. I will be
master’s
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a master’s
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 student and my program
called
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 “
Menegment
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Management
 in the military sphere”.
31th
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 August I move
in
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to
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 Moscow, where I will have lived
about
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for about
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 two years. My
diplom
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diploma
 thesis will be
ralate
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related
with
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to
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 my future work –
department
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the department
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 of external economy activity. I will live in the
MGIMO
 dormitory, and I had better give
place
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a place
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 in the nearest dormitory to my institute. The major course in the
MGIMO
 is English language, students have
possibility
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the possibility
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write
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to write
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 their grade work
on
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in
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 two languages: English and Russian. I want to get a part-time job,
what
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that
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ralate
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related
with
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to
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 my specialization. So
state
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the state
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 corporation Rostec
have
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has
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 to pay for my training, I think it may give me anything job
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as assistant
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assistant
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. It will be great, because in
this
 situation I have been having almost two years of experience
,
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 when I graduate from
the
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MGIMO
.
Also
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 I hope to will find new friends and I am going to learn
Moscow
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about Moscow
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,
visite
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visit
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 the famous place of it, and walk in the different parks.
This
 first time, when I so far and so long leave my family. I had better often come to my hometown and see
with
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my relatives and friends. But I guess
study
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in
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at
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the
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MGIMO
 is very intensive and complex,
therefore
 likely I can’t spend much time on
trip
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trips
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 to my home. I know it is
great
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a great
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 experience for me and the
MGIMO
 diploma help me
for
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apply
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find
interesting
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an interesting
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 job, which will
be relate
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be related
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with
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to
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 negotiations with potential partners, participation in international exhibitions, trips to other countries and other more.
This
 summer was difficult for me, in ten days I am visiting Abkhazia, there I will relax and after with
new
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 force to study and work. I think, it will be
interesting
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an interesting
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 period in my life and I am happy that I
give
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given
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this
 opportunity to
entier
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enter
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in
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apply
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the
MGIMO
.
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