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(Table) The table below gives information related to population growth, average birth per woman, life expectancy at birth in countries with different income levels in 2000 and 2004. Summarise the information making comparisons where relevant.

(Table) The table below gives information related to population growth, average birth per woman, life expectancy at birth in countries with different income levels in 2000 and 2004. Summarise the information making comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the growth of population, average fertility
rate
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, and life expectancy at
birth
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 in
nations
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 with categorized
income
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 levels in 2002 and 2004.
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,
higher
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higher-income
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income
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countries
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 experienced lower population growth and average
birth
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 per woman.
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, all
nations
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 witnessed an increase in life expectancy at
birth
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 for the period. Regarding the population growth
rate
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,
high
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high-income
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income
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countries
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 witnessed a minimal drop from 0.8% in 2002 to 0.7% in 2004,
while
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 the figure for
middle
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middle-income
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income
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nations
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 experienced a plateau at 0.9%. Despite having the highest
rate
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 throughout the period, the percentage of
low
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low-income
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income
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countries
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 dipped slightly from 2% in 2002 to 1.8% in 2004. Concerning the fertility
rate
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, female citizens from
high
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high-income
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income
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countries
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 gave
birth
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 to an average of 1.7 infants in both years, which was the lowest. The statistics for middle and
low
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income
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nations
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 were 2.2 and 3.9 in 2002, respectively, after which they both decreased by around 0.1 in 2004. Turning to life expectancy at
birth
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,
high
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high-income
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income
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countries
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 ranked first at 78 years old in 2002. The next highest data was
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from middle
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middle
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middle-income
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income
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nations
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 at 69.1, followed by
low
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low-income
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income
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countries
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 at 58.1. In 2004, all
countries
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 saw an increase of approximately 0.8 in
this
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 category.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, birth, nations, income, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Population growth rate
  • Average birth per woman
  • Life expectancy at birth
  • Income levels
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Trends
  • Demographic factors
  • Correlations
  • Improvements
  • Declines
  • Statistics
  • Comparisons
  • High-income countries
  • Low-income countries
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