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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is humans, who born with certain talants, such as music talents or more phisical facilities in sports

One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is
humans
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, who
born
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 with certain
talants
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traits
,
such
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 as
music
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 talents or more
phisical
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physical
 facilities in sports. It
is well know
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fact
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 that
people
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 with certain
talants
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talents
 become an
essentail
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essential
 part of our life.
However
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, there is no absolute agreement on whether
people
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 with
talants
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talents
 have more opportunities than regular
humans
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 A commonly held belief is that persons with
abilities
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 in some spheres can be more facilities than other
people
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. As evidence of
this
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 they point to
sportmens
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sportsmen
sports
 with physical
abilities
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.
For
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example
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, Shaquille O’Neal with his
abilities
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in
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particular
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 weight and height, which help him be more effective in
basketball
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the basketball
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 platform.
Furthermore
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, we can mark children with born talents in science,
as
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 Mathematics or other. It could be explained by the fact that these
peoples
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people
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ancosters
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ancestors
 or parents have alike
abilities
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. We can explain that with
this
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example
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,
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apply
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 if parents or
ancosters
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ancestors
 have a talent
with
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for
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 music, their
grandchilds
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grandchildren
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 have
chance
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a chance
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 born with
this
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 talent.
As a result
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, it leads to some
humans
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are
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being
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 born with certain
skills
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.
On the other hand
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, some
people
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 claim that
children’s
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children are
children have
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 never born with certain
skills
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.
For
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example
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, they think that
children
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children's
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 milieu can influence their
skills
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 in certain areas.
In addition
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, we can lead
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example
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examples
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such
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 as wrestling fighters.
The wrestling
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Wrestling
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 fighters start their training
in
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at
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 young age and
this
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 exercise can influence their physical
skills
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like
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wrestlers are in better physical shape than ordinary
people
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. The explanation lies in the fact that
humans
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, who
hardworking
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 and beat at one point can be seen
more
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as more
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 talented, but
in
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on
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other
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the other
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 hand they spend more time and power to reach that.
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, the principle, which
invented
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was invented
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 by Charles Darwin, can be correct, “It is not the strongest of the species that survives, nor the most intelligent, but the one most responsive to change”.

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