Some high schools require all students to wear school uniforms. Other high schools permit students to decide what to wear to school. Which of these two school policies do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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present, many
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their own because some
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uniform have many advantages. In Thailand, most
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high schools require
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to wear
school
uniforms for discipline and for unity. That
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all
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government high schools have the rule for
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all
students
. In my opinion, the
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uniform can make all
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student
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equal.
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student
who
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a family
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family
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can support expense for them, they can wear
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dress
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but some
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in
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poor
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family that can’t support them, they
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wear old clothes that they have. We will see many social classes in
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,
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student
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students
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who come from
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family we will see expensive things or new cloth will make
they
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feel confident more than
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a student
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student
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who wear old clothes. For
me
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school
uniforms have many good reasons and I think it has value more than
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that we have to pay for
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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