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Should parents be obliged to immunise their children against disaeses? or do individuals have the right to choose not to immunise their children? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience

#parents #immunise #children #disaeses #individuals #right
In recent years, the question of whether guardians should be bound to get their offspring to be vaccinated or not has sparked a controversy.
Although
 immunization
protect
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 infants against various ailments, I wholeheartedly contend that parents should not be pushed by anyone to follow
this
 trend. The factors responsible
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this
 mindset would be elaborated
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in
following
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 paragraphs. The major cause is that carers hold detailed information about their minor's health with reasonable facts. Elaborating
this
further
, they are the birth givers,
where
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 they know what is desirable or undesirable for their infants.
Infact
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In fact
, it is
undeniable
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 fact that
human
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body
 becomes more capable of fighting against sickness
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 its own without any vaccination.
For instance
, it is generally seen that in many countries
such
 as India, Pakistan and South Africa, where most
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the
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individuals have to live
under
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below
poverty
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 line because of the lack of governmental support, their children have not gotten any kind of vaccination, but still, they lead a healthy life. Henceforth, it is vivid from
an
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 abovementioned example that exposure to more diseases strengthens an immunity system.
Moreover
, inoculation can have adverse effects on the child's
body
. Even though, medications are fully tested before making available to the markets,
it
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 still can put someone's life in danger. As
every
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body
 is different.
Thus
, if something works for one, it does not mean that it would work for another too. To exemplify, Covid-19 vaccine is the best example
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this
. During pandemic times, various adults vaccinated their children with the thought that their juveniles would not expose
coronavirus
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 after getting its shot.
However
,
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 situation was encountered in most cases, where
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 of masses including lads lost their lives.
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, it is
injustice
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on
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 caretakers, if they are forced to inject any medication inside their little one's
body
. To
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, it can be concluded that parents have few valid points that are capable of persuading legal bodies about taking a decision of not immunizing their child against various illnesses.
Therefore
, if they opt not to do it, there is nothing wrong
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 it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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