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In some countries the averge wight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing what do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them ?

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There are a number of elements why
people
 tend to a sedentary lifestyle. In
addtion
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addition
, they eat a lot of junk foods instate of nutritious meals ,
thus
 fat and oil cause there will be
overwight
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overweight
. I believe
this
 phenomenon occurs in poor countries.
This
 essay will note the reasons
of
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problem
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the problem
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. It is strongly recommended that exercising is the best way to lose
wight
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 because when individuals do sport after that , not only do they sweat a lot which
is
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a
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result in
what
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some
burn
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 some fat off their body , but
also
 it reduces
this
 risk of
diseas
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diseases
 and health
problem
such
 as a heart attack. Another good effect is that
people
 have a
recharg
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recharge
 the
batteris
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batteries
 and get rid of stress and anxiety.
Moreover
, today's,
people
 eat
fastfoods
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fast foods
 namely,
Pitzza
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Pizza
, Pasta and burger instate of
nurtritious
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nutritious
 meals,
unfortunately
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fastfoods
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fast foods
rich
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 in cheese,
spice
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 and oil which are made with low-quality ingredients. As a
consequent
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, it is really incompatible with health.
According to
 the arguments mentioned above, my point of view is that there are a few ways to tackle
this
problem
. In my
opnioin
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opinion
, a sound mind lies in a sound body , everyone should have a balanced diet and avoid unhealthy foods ,
furthermore
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people
 choose one sport and
doing
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 it. I think
,
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government must inform
people
 through TV , radio or social media about
this
 issue. If everyone is obese, they will deal with
serious
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the serious
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problem
 which is really dangerous.
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