It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age .punishment is necessary to help them learn the distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?. What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

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is argued that
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should be taught ethics and moral values to inculcate good
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. that will help them in becoming
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with the statement
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is necessary to understand
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between right and wrong.
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them of their favourite things or scolding them will
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help them in learning good
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. Parents and teachers should observe
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children
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behaviour
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and understand the root causes of bad
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will help them in punishing
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so that they can understand
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the consequences
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of their
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, Any harsh
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should not be given to them.
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must be treated in
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a way they understand
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the results
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of their
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behaviour
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harsh
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is given to
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.it is not helping in controlling
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rate in
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. One of the
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to punish
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is to reprimand them
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their
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tone. that will
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make
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them watchful of their actions.
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, it will be helpful in controlling their habits and
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. Any severe physical
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should not be given to them. As it makes them resentful and angry .
punishment
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should be done in
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a manner that
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learn the difference between good and bad
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. In conclusion ,
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children
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must be given to make them better
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. they should be treated to understand
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the difference
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between good and bad
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. any harsh treatment should not be given to them as it
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in
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becoming resentful and angry .
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should be
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that their
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should be good and mindful.I believe that
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is necessary to control the
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behaviour
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but it should not be too harsh
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them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • punishment
  • positive reinforcement
  • consequences
  • time-outs
  • removal of privileges
  • open communication
  • clear expectations
  • consistency
  • fairness
  • disciplinary action
  • proportionate
  • moral values
  • internalization
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