Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Many people around the World
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least once experienced
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when they thought that
this terrible situations
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this terrible situation
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,
such
as lack of money and not suitable work impossible to improve and it is better to accept that it is happened.
However
, I agree that people should try to deal with experienced difficulties and concentrate
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with
positive
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outlook to their
lifes
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. On the one hand, people meet bad situations in order to understand the specific lesson from it.
For example
,
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individuals become broke when they make
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decision of buying something without knowing if they need it at
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cases cost huge money and buying for
this
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what money
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will pay for rent or groceries
this
person
would not be able to afford simple things for a
while
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if they would not do any action to deal with it. So, it is better to think deeply before making some decisions and it if happens to improve
this
situation.
On the other hand
,
person
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may have
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job with
high
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salary, but unfortunately
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is
also
unsatisfactory. In
this
case, I believe that it is better to accept
this
situation, as with the help of
this
job
person
can afford everything
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if.
this
person
optimistic
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then
they will find
way
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to be
pleasure
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and look from
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.
To sum up
, I think that with
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outlook
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life can improve
diffecalties
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difficulties
that may seem impossible.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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