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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons when relevant.

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The maps illustrate Grange
Park
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`s transformation since it was first opened in 1920 until the present moment. The
rose
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garden
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 on the Northeast is the only feature that remained in the same spot, with the pond for
water
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 plants and glasshouse being removed over time.
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, the addition of a car
park
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 is a modern development. In 1920, Grange
Park
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 was opened with two entrances, one from Arnold Avenue to the North, and another from Eldon Street to the South. The
park
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 had 3
rose
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 gardens, two on each side of the Arnold Avenue
entrance
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, and the other at the left on the
entrance
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 at Eldon Street. Between the entrances, at the middle of the part, a fountain could be found and at its left, the stage for musicians was another component of the original
park
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. On the right part of the
park
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, there was one
rose
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garden
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 and a pond for
water
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 plants at the North, and a glasshouse was on the opposite side of those. Seats could be found in five different locations. Grange
Park
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 has undergone several modifications, the only features that have not changed were the entrances’ locations and the
rose
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garden
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 at the right of the
entrance
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 at Arnold Avenue. The
rose
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garden
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 at the left of that
entrance
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 was replaced by a café and the former pond for
water
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 plants is now a children`s play area. Where was the glasshouse, it is now a
water
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 feature. The fountain in front of the entrances was demolished and replaced by a
rose
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garden
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, all seats in the
park
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 are now concentrated around that
rose
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garden
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. The stage for musicians was developed into an amphitheatre for concerts that accommodated many audiences. The
park
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 now has an underground car
park
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alterations
  • renovations
  • modernize
  • upgraded
  • transformed
  • landscaping
  • facilities
  • amenities
  • preservation
  • heritage
  • green spaces
  • eco-friendly
  • public space
  • community impact
  • historical elements
  • conservation
  • recreational areas
  • urban planning
  • sustainable development
  • layout
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