The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparison where relevant.
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The bar chart shows data about how families spent their weekly
income
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in 1968 and 2018 in a nation.
Overall
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, in 1968 they spent
the
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apply
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most
their
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of their
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money
for
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on
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food
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and they only spend a
few
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little
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income
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incomes
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for
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on
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fuel and power. Meanwhile, in 2018 many people spend a lot of money for leisure and a little for
personals
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personal
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goods. A deep analysis of the bar chart provided reveals the percentage of spending on
food
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in 1968 is highest
with
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at
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35%.
In contrast
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, they don't use a
lot
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oflot
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money for fuel and power with only around 7% of
weekly
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their weekly
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income
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. The percentage of spending on
food
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doubled between 1968 and 2018. It is
notice able
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noticeable
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that
in
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In
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2018 people spent the most
their
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of their
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weekly
income
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for
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on
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leisure
with
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at
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about 24% and
lowest
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the lowest
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with
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at
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around 4%
for
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on
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personal goods and fuel power similar
with
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to
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in 1968. The percentage of spending on
food
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slightly
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is slightly
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over
around
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apply
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6% more than
for
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on
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housing.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words income, food with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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