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Plan A below shows a health centre in 2005. Plan B shows the same place in the present day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.

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The maps compare a
health
 centre in 2005 and in the present day.
Overall
, it can clearly be seen that there are many improvements to the
health
 centre.
However
, the garden and physiotherapy room remained the same. Regarding
health
 care prior to development, there were only 3 CR rooms, two on the left side of the
reception
desk
, and one
on the other hand
. There were only a few seats for waiting. The entrance was located opposite the
reception
desk
.
However
, the car parking was only available for 12 cars. In terms of the changes in
health
 care. there were an increasing number of seats for patient and CR rooms.
Nevertheless
, the minor operations room is built to do some operations. It is next to the physiotherapy room. The office become larger than before. The entrance is moved to the left side of the map. The
reception
desk
 moves next to the entrance to make the patient easier to find it. They
also
 build a play area for children near the
reception
desk
.
Moreover
, car parking is now available for 30 spaces.
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