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One of the widely disscussed issues nowadays is that some people born with certain talents

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One of the widely
disscussed
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 issues nowadays is that some people
born
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 with certain talents.
For
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 some of them have
talent
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a talent
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 for sport or music and
other
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others
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 might
have
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not.But most
of
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people think that it can be taught to become a good
sports
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person
 or musician. I believe that every
person
 who was born with talents can become a man of his own business and develop it faster than other people.
However
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 a
person
 without any talents would be harder to master anything and maybe if he would be more patient and hardworking
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 a
person
 with
talent
. from my own experience ,I have some musical
talent
 and I learned to play the piano at a music school and studied there for seven years.In seven years, I realized that even if you studied with an innate
talent
, you need to be diligent and not lose heart if you had a failure.
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