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The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie charts provide data about what technological devices people aged from 18 to 25 used for watching
television
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 in Canada in the years 2009 and 2019.
Overall
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, in the beginning, traditional
tv
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 was the biggest segment
while
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 the tablet made up the smallest part of the chart. In comparison, young people used conventional
television
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 the least and
television
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 is mostly watched on flat-screen
Tv
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 and mobile phone by them in the year 2019. As can be seen from the illustration in 2009, most Canadians of
this
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 age group preferred to watch
tv
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 on a conventional device.
This
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 was followed in second place by laptops, with 20
percent
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per cent
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. The desktop computer was the third most preferred device
this
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 year with 18 % of
viewers
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.
While
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 the rest of the
viewers
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 of 15% watched
tv
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 on their mobile phones, the proportion of
viewers
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 on flat-screen and tablets was 8% and 5% respectively.
At the end
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 of the period, the number of Canadians who used conventional
tv
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 as a device to watch
television
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 went into free fall
while
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 the rates of those who used a laptop and a desktop for watching
Tv
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 had declined by 8% and 6% respectively.
On the other hand
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, the figures for
Tv
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viewers
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 on flat-screen drastically increased by 19% whilst the
tv
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viewers
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 on mobile phones and tablets had considerable improvement by 11% and 14% respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words television, tv, viewers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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