Some people believe that no one should do the same job for all their working life. Others argue that doing the same job brings advantages for individuals, companies, and society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, some people argue that
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at
same
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job
for life
have
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lots of benefits for
employers
. Others believe that keep changing work have more beneficial for individuals. In my
opinion
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I think it is better to stay at
same
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jobs
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as it
is bring
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alot
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a lot
of benefits. On one hand,
employers
who stay at
same
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job
gain several benefits as the salaries increase
along with
their developments in
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ladder.
In addition
. If workers stay in
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job
, they will be more trained and more responsible.
For example
, doctors who work in
uk
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UK
begin with small salaries and
less
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skills but after 15 years they will be
specialist
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specialists
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in their field and
gey
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get
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high wages.
Secondly
, people who work for same
job
the get pensions and health insurance. On other the hand,
employers
who keep changing their
job
they
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find it more challenging and
wasting
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time.
However
,
due to
fast-base
life
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some
they
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find it more beneficial to change
job
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jobs
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as they gained new skills which may help them in future .
Moreover
, some companies give their
employers
high
salary
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and
promotion
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which is motivated
for
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workers to change the company In conclusion, the advantages of keeping
job
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a job
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for life
are outweigh
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the drawbacks. As
employers
get high skills and high salaries.
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