The bar graph show the global sales (in billions of dollars) by the four popular digital games from 2000 to 2006

The bar graph show the global sales (in billions of dollars) by the four popular digital games from 2000 to 2006
The bar graph gives information about the global
sales
(in billions of dollars) of four types of digital
games
over the seven years
period
.
Overall
, handheld
games
hit the highest point of global
sales
from 2000 to 2006.
By contrast
, the
sales
of console
games
showed a downward trend throughout the
period
. The
sales
of mobile and online
games
increased stability. In 2000, handheld
games’
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sales
had the biggest point at $6
billion
. Until 2006, the
sales
of handheld
games
reached a peak at under $18
billion
and became the first position in global
sales
. The
sales
of console
games
stood at $6
billion
initially
,
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but declined gradually every year and their
sales
had a half
at the end
of the
period
. Online and mobile phone
games’
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games
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sales
started rising in 2001 and 2002 at around 1 and 2
billion
dollars respectively.
However
, in the
last
period
,
the
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sales
of them increased rapidly by around 8 and 5
billion
dollars.
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