The bar graph show the global sales (in billions of dollars) by the four popular digital games from 2000 to 2006

The bar graph show the global sales (in billions of dollars) by the four popular digital games from 2000 to 2006
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The bar graph gives information about the global
sales
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(in billions of dollars) of four types of digital
games
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over the seven years
period
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.
Overall
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, handheld
games
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hit the highest point of global
sales
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from 2000 to 2006.
By contrast
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, the
sales
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of console
games
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showed a downward trend throughout the
period
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. The
sales
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of mobile and online
games
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increased stability. In 2000, handheld
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games’
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sales
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had the biggest point at $6
billion
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. Until 2006, the
sales
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of handheld
games
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reached a peak at under $18
billion
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and became the first position in global
sales
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. The
sales
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of console
games
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stood at $6
billion
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initially
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but declined gradually every year and their
sales
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had a half
at the end
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of the
period
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. Online and mobile phone
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games’
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games
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sales
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started rising in 2001 and 2002 at around 1 and 2
billion
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dollars respectively.
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, in the
last
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period
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,
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sales
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of them increased rapidly by around 8 and 5
billion
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dollars.
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