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Some people think that employers should not care about the way their employees dress, because what matters is the quality of their work. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is a controversial perspective heating up a debate over that it is not essential for employers to take how their
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dress
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 into consideration since job productivity is the major final aim. I partially uphold
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 notion. Without a shadow of a doubt, some
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 hold a strong view that wearing a uniform
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 to one’s
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 performance and will not cause any negative impacts in the workplace.
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 can be true since what
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 are wearing does not contribute directly to most of
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 they do at
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some large enterprises that do not restrict how
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dress
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 at
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 because their
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 have to spend most of their time at a computer or a desk and
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 they wear, may it be formal, casual, or semi-casual, it does not change the level of proficiency.
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, some companies may not be affected by how their
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dress
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 the outfits of
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 do not do harm to some firms,
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 may result in some undesirable problems regarding
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certain jobs. Having a smart outlook can facilitate the
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 assessment of a company by its customers, potentially leading to an increase in revenue and profit.
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, as a receptionist, a career which relates directly to an enterprise’s first impression so they must
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 formally for customers and guests to put more trust in the company.
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, a certain type of job like receptionist requires
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 to
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 properly so it cannot worsen the company’s productivity . In conclusion,
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 one’s clothing preference or
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 code at
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 does not directly influence productivity, its relevance is worth considering depending on the nature of
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dress code
  • professional attire
  • workplace culture
  • productivity
  • branding
  • perception
  • creativity
  • equality
  • bias
  • discrimination
  • first impressions
  • freedom of expression
  • quality of work
  • skill set
  • professionalism
  • comfort
  • clientele
  • stakeholders
  • competence
  • formal attire
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