In the last decade, there has been a great increase in international travel. What do you think are the reasons for this and do you think it is a good thing?

Nowadays people
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to visit new places and they love to see and do
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in
international
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company . There are many visitors in our
country
there are many visitors in our
country
so that a great increase in international
travel
,
most
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of them
liked
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to visit our
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. there has been many
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for
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international
travel
from our
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many tourists just come to see our beautiful
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great
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travel
agents there are many facilities
in
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international
travel
, it is a good
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for all of us
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if it will create
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an increase
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in international
travel
, there are benefits to our governments, and for us
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Affordability
  • Emerging economies
  • Disposable income
  • Technological advancements
  • Globalization
  • Interconnected
  • Cultural exchange
  • Tourism infrastructure
  • Carbon footprint
  • Heritage preservation
  • Economic growth
  • Burgeoning middle class
  • Online booking platforms
  • Travel apps
  • Social media influence
  • Global understanding
  • Cultural impact
  • Sustainable travel
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