The charts below prresent information about electricity generated using renewable and non-renewable energy in the United States in 2009 and 2019. Summries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevant.
The bar graphs illustrate
electricity
produced by renewable and non-renewable energy
in the United States in 2009 and 2019.
Overall
, coal and natural gas were generate
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generated
the
higher Correct article usage
apply
energy
by using non-renewable in 2009 and 2019 respectively. However
, renewable energy
sources such
as hydroelectric and wind were
produce more Unnecessary verb
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electricity
as compared to other sources .
To begin
with , petroleum produced only 57 billion
kilowatt
per hour in 2009 . Change to a plural noun
kilowatts
Whereas
, renewable source
, nuclear and natural gas Fix the agreement mistake
sources
generate
more than 400 Wrong verb form
generated
billion
kilowatts of electricity
in 2009 . On the contrary
, coal stand
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stands
to
the first position to generate Change preposition
in
electricity
with 1756 billion
killo
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kilo
kills
killed
watt
per hours
. Fix the agreement mistake
hour
In addition
, in 2019 natural gas produced higher electricity
as compared to other sources . Petroleum produced only 40 billion
killo
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kilo
kills
killed
watt
per every Change to a plural noun
watts
hours
.
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hour
Moreover
, the
renewable energies Correct article usage
apply
such
solar
wind , geothermal, plant/animal matter and hydroelectric Change preposition
as solar
were
contain Unnecessary verb
apply
the
lower Correct article usage
apply
electricity
as compared to non renewable
Add a hyphen
non-renewable
ernegies
. Wind produced 94 Correct your spelling
energies
billion
killo
watts in 2009 Correct your spelling
kilo
kills
killed
while
in 2019 it reached at
300 . Geothermal Change preposition
apply
energy
genrate
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generate
generates
lower
the 16 Correct article usage
a lower
billion
killon watt
in both years . In 2009 , Solar energy
contained only 1 billlion
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billion billion
killo
watts per hours
which increased Fix the agreement mistake
hour
almost
72 Change preposition
to almost
billion
after 10 years . Furthermore
, plant/ animal matter 9 (54 and 58 billion
kw) and hydroelectric energy
(273 billion
kw ) lead
to almost similar Wrong verb form
led
killo
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kilo
watt
in both years.Fix the agreement mistake
watts
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