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The pie chart below shows the different platforms used for international news content by people in the United Kingdom in 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart below shows the different platforms used for international news content by people in the United Kingdom in 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart
illustates
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illustrates
 that
people
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 used different
platform
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platforms
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 for international
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 -content in the United Kingdom in 2019.
Overall
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, television was the most
famouse
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famous
 source of international
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While
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,
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 words of mouth used for
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 was only 1%. We can see that
,
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 43% of
people
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 used television for international
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news
 content which was the highest
souce
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source
 of
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 as compared with
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others
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Whereas
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, 15% of
people
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 relied on
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the internet
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internet
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Simillarly
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Similarly
,
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folks
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 had not interested (15%) in
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international
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Morover
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Moreover
, social media stood
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the source
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 of international
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contentnwith
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content with
 14%.
However
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, other platforms of international
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 content contain less than 10%. Printed newspapers were 8% of
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while
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, radio provided
infomation
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information
 that half of
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the printed
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news papers
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newspapers
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On the contrary
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,
face to face
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contect
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contact
 was contain only 1% of
internation
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international
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contrent
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content
 by
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, news with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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