A friend of yours is thinking of going to a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friends. In your letter, Explain why you think your friend would enjoy camping holiday describe some possible disadvantages say whether you would like to go on camping with your friend this summer

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Dear Thomas, I hope I find you well. It's good to hear that you want to take a camping vacation

this

summer. I think it's ideal for you to take some

time

off work and enjoy yourself

together with

your family.

Although

the

last

camping holiday was in winter, you did

enjoyed

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and had a great

time

Therefore

, with

this

camping in summer, you will definitely enjoy it more, as the weather will be a bit favourable. You will

also

have a lot of animals to see because most of them won't be hibernating.

However

, you have to be aware of roaming predators at night, as they are restless because of the hot environment, and they may stray by your tent. Beware

also

of small insects that could be irritating. I would have loved to join you

this

time

around, but unfortunately, my leave days are a bit

further

into the summer. So, I can't accompany you

this

time

. I hope you enjoy the trip. Best wishes, Kennedy

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8 paragraphs

169 words

7.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

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Suitable writing tone

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