A friend of yours is thinking of going to a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friends. In your letter, Explain why you think your friend would enjoy camping holiday describe some possible disadvantages say whether you would like to go on camping with your friend this summer

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Dear Thomas, I hope I find you well. It's good to hear that you want to take a camping vacation

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summer. I think it's ideal for you to take some

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off work and enjoy yourself

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your family.

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camping holiday was in winter, you did

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and had a great

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, with

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camping in summer, you will definitely enjoy it more, as the weather will be a bit favourable. You will

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have a lot of animals to see because most of them won't be hibernating.

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, you have to be aware of roaming predators at night, as they are restless because of the hot environment, and they may stray by your tent. Beware

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of small insects that could be irritating. I would have loved to join you

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around, but unfortunately, my leave days are a bit

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into the summer. So, I can't accompany you

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. I hope you enjoy the trip. Best wishes, Kennedy

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

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8 paragraphs

169 words

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