Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve, while others think that the government cannot solve these environmental problems unless individuals make some action. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some
individuals
believe that environmental
crisis
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are too huge for
individuals
to tackle,
whereas
others feel that the
authority
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authorities
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cannot address these environmental
issues
unless
individuals
make some
step
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. In my opinion, only
government
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the government
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can solve
this
issue because
government
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the government
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have
power
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the power
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to introduce laws and raise awareness among
public
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the public
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. On the one hand, some think
individuals
can do many things to solve
environmenal
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environmental
problems.
To begin
with,
people
can use public transport rather than private vehicles in
order
to mitigate
Co2
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emissions.
This
is because greenhouse gases from
fumes
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of cars
is
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the main causes of environmental
issues
namely, air pollution, global warming, and climate change.
Furthermore
,
people
can recycle as much as possible in
order
to alleviate their waste , which
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can contribute to
reduce
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reducing
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rubbish in
environment
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the environment
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.
Therefore
, less rubbish
mean
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means
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less harm to
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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.
On the other hand
, I would like to agree with those
people
who believe
government
only can deal with environmental
crisis
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crises
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.
This
is because
government
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the government
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have
power
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the power
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to introduce harsh laws against environmental
issues
.
For instance
, lawmakers can introduce laws to set
limit
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limits
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of
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on
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air contamination from
factores
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factories
factors
in
order
to minimize
Co2
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the Co2
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footprint.
Moreover
,
government
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the government
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can impose taxes on deforestation in
order
to discourage companies
to
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from
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cutting down trees, which
this
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apply
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can protect natural resources.
Additionally
,
government
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the government
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could launch educational campaigns in
order
to raise
awarenss
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awareness
among
public
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the public
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about
benefits
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the benefits
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of
protect
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protecting
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ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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.
For example
, In the UK
government
organized many educational programs in schools, universities,
companies
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and companies
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to explain
for
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people
advantages
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the advantages
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of
protect
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protecting
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ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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.
To sum up
, from my perspective, only authorities can tackle environmental
issues
due to
they have
power
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the power
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of
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to
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introduce regulations
,
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apply
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and
raising
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raise
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awarenss
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awareness
among
people
.
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