Organized tour to remote areas and community is increasingly popular. Is it a positive or negative development for the local people and the environment?

With the improvement of
tourism
and globalisation, most
tourism
agencies are organizing tours to the countryside these days. Some people believe that
this
tourism
activity helps to develop in rural areas opportunities which
locals
have,
while
others think that the reverse is true.
This
has some positive impacts on the local people, but I think the detrimental
effects
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on the environment are more significant and that the issue is more of a negative development. First of all, the environment in the countryside hosts various kinds of animals,
such
as birds, fish etc.
According to
scientific reports, many types of fish are affected in a negative way during the
tourism
season.
For example
, the population of salmon in the ocean dramatically decreased, after the number of tours increased in Iceland.
Thus
, tourists should care for and respect the life condition of local and endangered species of animals. In regard to, people who live in rural areas have limited chances about their life conditions.
For instance
, the amount of food depends on the weather condition,
additionally
, after a hard winter season the amount of harvested crops is just enough only local
peoples
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eating habits. During the tour season,
locals
couldn't answer the demand of tourists. Because of
this
,
tourism
agencies ought to access fresh information about local life. So,
to sum up
, it is clear to say that,
tourism
is one the most important income sources for the
locals
.
However
, especially in
dangered
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situations, the government and
locals
should cooperate together to protect their natural environment. I think that the negative environmental consequences that
this
situation brings are far more significant.
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