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Many governments have laws that ban the sale and use of hard drugs such as heroin and cocaine, yet they allow people to buy drugs such as tobacco and alcohol. Laws that prohibit the sale and use of hard drugs should be applied to all drugs, including tobacco and alcohol. What is your opinion?

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Most countries around the world have strict regulations against the use of
drugs
 like cocaine and heroin.
However
, the purchase of
tobacco
 and
alcohol
 merits no restrictions and so
people
 have easy access to them with no limitations. These days, some
people
 demand a uniform law to include even
alcohol
 and all
tobacco
 product sale under prohibition. I do completely agree with
this
 belief and will give my supportive points for the same in
this
 essay.
Firstly
, why
tobacco
 and
alcohol
 should be included in the government's illegal drug categories like cocaine and heroin
due to
 significant health issues resulting from the consumption of these poisons
.
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 There are numerous cases of oral and lung cancers diagnosed every day in a hospital
due to
 smoking and
tobacco
 chewing.
Moreover
, trauma injuries resulting
due to
alcohol
 drinking are continuously rising despite a police watch.
For example
, recently research from an emergency department of an Indian government hospital reported 1 every 100 patients suffered
due to
 these
drugs
.
Furthermore
, addiction to any kind of mind-altering substance seriously affects young
people
's creativity and ability to work. These youngsters are considered the future of any nation, and usage of any
such
drugs
 affects their working and indirectly affects the economy, not alone at a personal level, but their nation's growth and economy too.
Next,
some folk make their businesses by illegally trading
such
 products and
hence
 promote a system of criminal activities. Many
such
people
 do international smuggling of hard
drugs
as well as
alcohol
 and crime rates are rising continuously. In conclusion,
due to
 the aforementioned reasons, I completely agree with the given statement and authorities should apply laws to stop the sale of all kinds of brain-modulating
drugs
 including
tobacco
 and
alcohol
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Chronic diseases
  • Substance abuse
  • Psychological dependency
  • Social stigma
  • Preventive measures
  • Legislative framework
  • Healthcare expenditure
  • Judicial system
  • Prohibition era
  • Civil liberties
  • Tax revenues
  • Harm reduction
  • Ethical considerations
  • Public health policy
  • Addiction treatment
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