Some jobs are based at a single work place where the hours are the same each day, while other jobs involve frequent travel and irregular working hours. Discuss the advantage of both types of job and give your own opinion about which one is best.

In my opinion, Jobs which involve Travel and irregular working
hours
are better than steady, fixed
hours
Job
.
This
is based on the distinct advantages of the former
work
pattern over the Stero-type
work
culture. The Office based
work
, revolving around the clock with fixed
hours
per day is typically monotonic with top-down command of the chain.
This
work
culture provides a lifestyle with less hassle of commute, travel and health-related issues and a safe comfort zone. ,
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as per Human psychology, people with greater ambitions, and higher focus towards greater achievement tend to get bored. They end up
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switching Jobs frequently.
In contrast
, Travel based e.g. business development type of Jobs is something which provides unique
challenges
to conquer and
hence
yields opportunities for Growth.
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person who is loving to accept
challenges
and trying to achieve higher goals
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would love his
job
. The commute-related risks and physical pain, and mental fatigue are the side effects,
although
the happiness and growth in the career dimension outweigh these
challenges
. Irregular working
hours
may
also
lead to health
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,
due to
uncertain lunch/supper timings and excessive tea, and coffee intake.
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determination and keeping a strict diet can overcome these
challenges
, as my personal experience tells me. In summary, a challenging
job
leading to a greater vision of a Career provides a much better proposition than a
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fixed-
hours
office
Job
in my opinion.
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