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Some people think that it's a good idea to socialise with work colleagues during evenings and weekends. Other people think it is important to keep working life completely from social life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is sometimes difficult to create good relationships, some workers who socialise during their free
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 think that it is beneficial
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 other people believe in the importance to separate
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 and social
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 balance. In my opinion, and depending on my own experience, socialising with job colleagues could be a good idea. You spend most of the
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 of your
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 at
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, and creating a good relationship is important. That depends on the colleague you working with, if you have the same age, the same interests, it will be obvious to spend more
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 together during the evening and weekend. As an example, in my ,country I worked ten hours a day with my mate, and we had the same industry position,
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, we liked parties or the gym. We spent a lot of
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 together during our free
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 and we created a good relationship which was beneficial at
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.
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, I understand peoples want to keep away the relationship between
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 and social
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 because they don'
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 decide about their colleagues. Even though they could have a good atmosphere at
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, they don'
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 want to share their private
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 with them. In some activity sectors, could be hard for people to talk about their private choice of
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 the laugh or judgement of some immature people. I can
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 share the feeling of a supervisor or manager with responsibilities who don'
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 want to create a friendly attitude with their employee to keep a distance for better management.
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, could be difficult to go to a party with someone or share a private talk of
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 and the next week you should be fired him. To resume, It could be a good idea to spend more
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 with your workmate as long as you have no responsibility or subordinate link between each other. In the other case, it will be preferable to keep distance and don'
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 becoming friends.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • colleagues
  • socialising
  • work relationships
  • teamwork
  • positive
  • supportive
  • work environment
  • personal relationships
  • collaboration
  • communication
  • stress
  • well-being
  • work-life balance
  • personal time
  • boundaries
  • conflicts
  • burnout
  • professional
  • personal identities
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