Task 1: The line graph shows the percentage of New Zealand population from 1950 to 2050.

Task 1: The line graph shows the percentage of New Zealand population from 1950 to 2050.
The graph gives
the
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information
of
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the proportion of different age groups of
New
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the New
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Zealand population in a
hundred year
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period of time between 1950 to 2050. The group
of
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over 65 always showed the highest percentage of
growth
compared to the other three age groups. For
over
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65 category, it stood at 60% in 1950
then
increased gradually to nearly 70% in 1990 but declined to slightly below 60% in 2050. The second group 38-45 began with 20% of population
growth
.
This
number rose to 45% in 1990
then
had a small decrease to 35% in the next 10 years. It remained with
similar
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a similar
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growth
rate until 2050.
However
, the third group 25-37 had
similar
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a similar
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percentage with 38-45 in 1950 but
this
figure dropped significantly until a point of no
growth
in 2050.
On the other hand
, the youngest category of 0-14 showed a fall from 5% to 2% in the first 40 years. Despite that, it rose
steady
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to 20%
in
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at
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the end of the period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words growth with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 4 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuating trends
  • Projections
  • Percentage
  • Demographic changes
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Stable
  • Increase/Decrease
  • Growth/Decline
  • Patterns
  • Historical context
  • Population dynamics
  • Trends
  • Significant shifts
  • Peaks and troughs
  • Forecasts
  • Projections
  • Analysis
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