The chart below shows the amount of time that 10 to 15-year-olds spend chatting on the Internet and playing on games consoles on an average school day in the UK. ...
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bar chart illustrates the total time
of
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15 year
children are spending on Add a hyphen
15-year
internet
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the internet
chating
and playing Correct your spelling
chatting
on
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apply
games
during their regular school days within the UK.
Overall
, boys
are spending most of the
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their
time
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playing Change preposition
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games
but girls
are spending more time
on
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chating
on Correct your spelling
chatting
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the internet
internet
. Spending Capitalize word
Internet
time
less than an hour in a day is quite similar in both the
activities.
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chating
for less than an hour is quite Correct your spelling
chatting
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the same
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groups
boys
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around 20 percentage
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average
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,average
girls
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than
boys
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number of boys
spend
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who spend
time
is 30% to 35 % respectively, followed by others at around 28%. However
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are spending more than 4hrs in a day but Change preposition
of girls
remaining
people and Correct article usage
the remaining
boys
are spending less respectively in this
category.
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, boys
are utilizing most of the time
on games
which was
around 42% but Change the verb form
were
girls
are not engaging themselves in this
activit
as it was approximately 12%, Correct your spelling
activity
however
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the remaining
game
. Even, Fix the agreement mistake
games
ratio
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the ratio
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than
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a day
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contrast
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the contrast
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the ratio
on
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hour
games
is comparatively higher than boys
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