Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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issue nowadays is
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in schools . It is
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point of view , is that
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sunlight where you can have
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immune system is lower
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normal . And
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organism . On
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hand , some people believe that
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in schools is wasting their precious
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class that for them more reliable ,
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us maintain that lifestyle
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about or you living right at the moment .
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your being as human ! Having weighed everything mentioned up , we can come to a conclusion that without
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having
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It would be beneficial to develop your introduction further to clearly outline your stance and rephrase the question more formally.
coherence and cohesion
Improve transitions between points to enhance the flow of your essay. Ensure that each paragraph cohesively connects to the next.
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Provide more specific examples to better illustrate your arguments, particularly in discussing the benefits of sports.
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You demonstrate a clear understanding of the topic and present both sides of the argument.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences reflect a personal perspective and passion for the subject, which adds a unique voice to your writing.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fixed punishments
  • consistency
  • predictability
  • deter crime
  • potential offenders
  • streamline
  • judicial process
  • bias
  • corruption
  • complexity
  • human behavior
  • circumstances
  • justice system
  • intent
  • remorse
  • socio-economic background
  • rehabilitate offenders
  • recidivism rates
  • flexible punishment systems
  • inconsistencies
  • perceived injustices
  • public trust
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