Some people think that schools should reward students who show the best academic results, while others believe that it is more important to reward student who show improvements.

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It is apparent from reading the news that nowadays, some people believe that only
students
who achieve the best academic results should be rewarded,
while
others do not think so,they suggest that it is important to reward
students
who
show
improvement
.I will make an objective analysis of these two arguments in my following essay. One
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is that only
students
who achieve the best academic results should be rewarded.There is no doubt that rewarding is
a
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effective way
to
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teachers
or parents to acknowledge
students
’ success. At the same time,
students
also
feel proud when they are rewarded,
that
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definitely plays
an
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positive
role
in their mental health.
In addition
,
teachers
can take advantage of rewards to increase
students
' competitiveness.A typical example is that if
teachers
decide to reward a student because he or she gains
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great achievement in
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,the other will see that one as a
role
model and
then
they will just focus on their
study
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studies
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so that they may make huge progress even outscore the student who is their
role
model before.
On the other hand
, it is argued that rewarding
students
who
show
improvement
is more important. To start with,rewarding
students
who
show
improvement
can cultivate
students
' independence.Because by
this
way,
students
can realize that only through their own efforts can they get what they want. Only
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this
way can
teachers
also
motivate
students
to work harder.
Besides
, it can promote their growth and development.
For example
, when
students
are rewarded,
students
feel that their growth and development
is
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valuable.So, they can gain huge confidence and increase their enthusiasm to a certain extent. From my own perspective, I am convinced that rewarding
students
who achieve the best academic results and rewarding
students
who
show
improvement
are not mutually exclusive and should go hand in hand with each other. Neither side should be taken to extremes.To illustrate, the former
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an indispensable
role
to play
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and
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the latter ought to take
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part in
this
process. In fact, the perfect combination of both is the most desirable mode of ensuring the sustainable development of rewarding
students
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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