The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
The provided chart illustrates the ten countries which are the most consumers and producers of electricity in 2014.
It is clearly observed that the overproducer and overconsumer were China, whilst the least one was Korea.
The figure for China and the USA were significantly higher than other counties. China’s
production
was about 5398 billion
kWh
,similarly
that of the USA was 4099 Add a comma
,similarly
billion
kWh
. Whereas
, the amount
of their consumption was 5322 and 3866 billion
kWh
, respectively. Moreover
, the amount
of production
and consumption in Russia was approximately equal to each other about 1050. Japan, India, and Canada ranked 4th, 5th, and 6th in this
table and they utilized electricity from 856.7, 698.8 and 499.9 billion
kWh
, respectively. While
these three countries produced electricity between 936.2 and 618.9 billion
kWh
. The figures in both groups for France, Brazil, and Germany fluctuated around 500 billion
Kwh
. Finally
, the lowest amount
of consumption and production
accounted for Korea, as its consuming amount
was 449.5 billion
Kw and the amount
of its production
was 485.1 billion
kWh
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