The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
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The provided chart illustrates the ten countries which are the most consumers and producers of electricity in 2014. It is clearly observed that the overproducer and overconsumer were China, whilst the least one was Korea. The figure for China and the USA were significantly higher than other counties. China’s
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was about 5398
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similarly
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that of the USA was 4099
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.
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, the
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of their consumption was 5322 and 3866
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, respectively.
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, the
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of
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and consumption in Russia was approximately equal to each other about 1050. Japan, India, and Canada ranked 4th, 5th, and 6th in
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table and they utilized electricity from 856.7, 698.8 and 499.9
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, respectively.
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these three countries produced electricity between 936.2 and 618.9
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. The figures in both groups for France, Brazil, and Germany fluctuated around 500
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, the lowest
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of consumption and
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accounted for Korea, as its consuming
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was 449.5
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Kw and the
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of its
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was 485.1
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kWh
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • megawatt-hours (MWh)
  • electricity grid
  • renewable energy sources
  • fossil fuels
  • energy efficiency
  • consumption patterns
  • power generation
  • industrial demand
  • residential use
  • transmission losses
  • energy imports
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • energy policy
  • capacity
  • infrastructure
  • demand and supply
  • electrification
  • energy security
  • grid reliability
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