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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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One of the modern discussions is finding the best way of
students
’ education. Many people think that all university
students
 should attend lessons which will be used by them in the future,
while
 others say that
students
 should
study
 whatever they like. I prefer the second variant and now aim to dissect
this
 proposition
further
.
Firstly
, pupils are responsible enough to make a mature choice in their
study
 program,
therefore
study
 programs will become more optional than if their schedule is made without their opinion.
Also
, if
students
 will only take
study
 credits that they really want they will not have any uncomfortable occasions. We should
also
 not forget about their mental health, and if we will make
students
study
 subjects that are not their cup of tea some may potentially suffer from mental burnout.
However
, there is a disadvantage, which I suppose is not really important; if the
students
 will
study
 a subject that we will include in their
study
 program perhaps they might become more well-rounded compared to the option where they learn whatever they want to learn.
Secondly
, the variant with makes pupils do many unwanted studies is really dangerous because of several reasons. The first reason includes the human factor: some may lose interest in learning their profession, because of overloading on unloved subjects. The second reason lies in the fact that pupils physically have no chance of remembering all information that they
study
 and
finally
 they may forget important skills in their speciality.
Therefore
,
this
 could not be a winning plan anyway. In conclusion, I can say that we should not force
students
 to learn only specific skills
,
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 but give them the right to make choices.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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