The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided chart illustrates the number of birth in Australia and the
immigrants
who are living in urban, rural, and Correct quantifier usage
number of immigrants
town
from 1995 and 2010.
It is clearly observed that the number of Fix the agreement mistake
towns
immigrants
who lived in cities accounted for the highest figure
over the period.
In 1995, the percentages
of local people who lived in Fix the agreement mistake
percentage
ciries
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cities
was
about 50%, Change the verb form
were
whereas
that of
in 2010 was above 60 %. Change preposition
apply
In addition
, the percentages for Astralians
who choose Correct your spelling
Australians
town
and rural areas for living were 20% and 30% in 1995, respectively. These Add an article
a town
figure
in 2010 were equal to each other. About Fix the agreement mistake
figures
immigranats
, 60% and 70% of Correct your spelling
immigrants
immigrants
decided to live in cities in 1995 and 2010, respectively. Moreover
, the figure
for immigrants
who lived in towns in 1995 was abot
10% and that Correct your spelling
about
of
in 2010 was lower at approximately 5%. Change preposition
apply
Finally
, the percentages
of foreign people who stayed Fix the agreement mistake
percentage
at
rural areas was 40%, Change preposition
in
in
contrast
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this
figure
significantly decreased to almost 5%.Submitted by fatemeh.gh9797 on
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