The given line graph illustrates the proportion of the total music sold by three different ways between 2011 to 2010.
The given line graph illustrates the Proportion of how many types of music sales
according to
three different methods.
In general, the total of
Change preposition
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the
music salesCorrect article usage
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remaining
steady throughout the whole period. Wrong verb form
remained
Additionally
, the figure for CDS Purchased was lower than that for those Downloads by the end of the the
Period. The streams saw a steady rise Remove the redundancy
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40
% .
The Streams method of Music Sales saw a steady rise, starting at 5 % in 2011 and gradually increasing to 40% in 2018, Change preposition
of 40
then
became plateauing. The downloads began at 35% in 2011,
and increased to 43% and felly Remove the comma
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decreasing
until the end Period remaining steady, with the Wrong verb form
decreased
purchased
of the CPs following a similar general path.Replace the word
purchase
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