Many people find it difficult to live a healthy life. What are the difficulties they face? What can these people do to become healthier?

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Poor quality diet and sedentary lifestyle are two factors that lead to potential medical complications for
people
especially
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in the current era of globalization.
However
, some
people
find it difficult to maintain a healthy and balanced habit for modern civilized citizens and the reasons behind these two aspects of the argument will be explored in
this
essay. To commence with, a busy lifestyle and the rapid development of technology are the two main key points that lead to
imbalance
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in adapting to a healthy style of living. In fact, a boisterous life forces
people
to tend to eat junk food which contains high in fat, cholesterol, sugar and low in nutrients
such
as fried chicken, hamburgers,
pizza
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and pizza
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that causes obesity and diseases related to cardiovascular are becoming more and more common.
Moreover
, the advent of computer technology in general and smartphones
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in particular
has promoted a more passive lifestyle globally as some individuals prefer to spend their leisure time surfing Tiktok, Facebook or Youtube
instead
of doing exercise or ẹnjoying outdoor activities with friends. Despite those challenges and in order to address these obstacles, first and foremost, not only adjust
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habitants
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daily routine but
also
manage their time scientifically. To be more particular,
people
should change their eating habits by using nutritious foods
such
as being able to cook simple but healthy meals themselves or
order
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healthy meals
instead
of fast food and
add
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fresh vegetables and fruits to the daily menu to increase the body's resistance.
In addition
, if
people
want to stay
a
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healthy body,
then
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they
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should put down
the
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phone and do some simple physical activities,
for example
, walking for twenty minutes, cleaning the house, gardening or mowing the lawn and they can ride a bike
going
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to work
instead
of taking a car or motorbike,
this
has a positive impact on everyone's health
as well as
contributes to environmental conservation. In short,
due to
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busyness and the speedy advancement of hi-tech, it has made it more difficult and passive for
people
to become healthier,
however
, to move towards a healthier life in the future,
then
changing daily habits and knowing how to manage personal time in a scientific way will not be difficult to change if
people
have strong determination.
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