Today family members eat fewer meals together. What is your opinion on this?

This
is quite evident that family bonding is much necessary in
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era of technology. We have come across
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the news that
people
are not taking enough lunch or dinner altogether. Here, I will discuss the reasons for
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changes in the essay followed by my view.
To begin
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technology is expanding
day
by
day
and everyone has to work
in
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certain time limits.
People
are not getting time for their families because of
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race of money and ambitions. Not only
this
, earlier only men
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working for their children but now women
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also
doing some kind of activities to support
her
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husband.
This
development in
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pattern is quite affecting to old tradition where everyone to set at one
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particular
time for their meal.
Furthermore
, society
people
are not able to match their timings
due to
individual commitments,
also
children have started working in international schools that are offering lunch in the school only.
For instance
, daycare increasing by leaps and bounds as both mother and father are working in MNCs.
Secondly
, there are more nuclear families due
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metropolitan
culture and local
people
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home town for better prospects.
Hence
, there is a detrimental effect of
this
change as the individual is thinking for themselves only
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family so they don't believe in sharing their food.
For example
, most
of
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the Western
culture
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have adopted to celebrate mothers
Day
and fathers
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because they are not living jointly because unable to set with
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due to
their personal life. In my opinion, it would be not
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sign for the country if
people
will starts
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forgetting
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moral
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and ethics. Government and religious authorities should take ownership to make awareness about family ties.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • societal changes
  • modern work schedules
  • individualism
  • technology's influence
  • foster
  • communication
  • fast-paced lifestyle
  • adverse effects
  • dietary health
  • social development
  • restoring
  • isolating effects
  • digital media
  • face-to-face interaction
  • strengthening family bonds
  • family cohesion
  • crucial element
  • societal health
  • policies
  • initiatives
  • traditional values
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