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The plans below show the layout of a university sports center now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

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The provided plans depict the contemporary circumstance of a university’s
sports
 centre and the look after reconstruction by planned developments.
Overall
,
this
 area will undergo remarkable developments. It will become larger than the present look and several facilities will add to
this
 area
such
 as a big leisure
pool
,
sports
 halls, different places for changing rooms and invest dance studios
as well as
 a café and
sport
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 shop. To start with the west side of
this
 centre, the outdoor courts will destroy to make place for the leisure
pool
 and in the south of
this
pool
, a new changing room and
sports
 shop will construct. The location of changing room near the leisure
pol
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pool
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 will not change, the reception, the 25
meters’
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pool
, and the seating area will not undergo any changes as well.
Whereas
, the gym will expand to the right side of the centre. Where the
sports
 hall will stand, there used to be
the
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outdoor courts.
Moreover
, two new dance studios will build in the east of the
sports
 hall and the gym.
In addition
, there will be some developments so as to set up a new changing room and a café
in
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 the right side of the reception.
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