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some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.

#people #professionals #doctors #engineers #work #country
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The
professionals
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’ choice between working in the
country
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 where they have been trained and in another
country
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 where they wish sparks a debate between
people
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,
while
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 some
people
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 think they should stay in the training location
other
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others
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 argue that they are free to have a career where they tend to. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss both of these
arguements
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arguments
 and give my own opinion. Every government allocates a specific amount of its national budget to train and educate
professionals
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, starting from primary education grades to tertiary
educations
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education
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. Some
people
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 believe that
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professionals
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 like doctors and engineers who used
this
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 budget and educational facilities in a particular
country
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 should work in the same
country
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 to return the favour of
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 budget and help to improve the life quality of that
country
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 and its society which seems reasonable considering the great amount of required funding which is provided by tax and other public sources of the society.
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, considering individuals’ right
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 freedom of having a decent job forms an opposite point of view where
people
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 argue that everyone, including engineers and
doctors
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 are free to obtain a career in their desired location, whether it is a foreign
country
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 or the
country
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 where they had training.
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, it is the case in countries where there are not adequate and suitable job opportunities for
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 or the payment does not afford their needs so based on the training location,
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the work
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work force
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 should not be obliged and limited to stay in the
country
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 if there
is
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 not proper opportunities for them.
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, I think due
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 specific economic, social and political circumstances of each
country
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, governments should regulate the working conditions of their
professionals
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 based on their needs to serve the national community.
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, obligations could be imposed on
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 to serve
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society for
certain
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a certain
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 period of time and
then
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 they would be free to immigrate and find a career overseas or different approaches can be taken into account to tackle the challenge of
professionals
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’ working destination.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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