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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you argee or disagree?

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Nowadays, online shopping is increasing day by day. As many start to buy their necessary things online, they believe that physical
shops
 will completely shut down in urban and rural areas. In
this
 essay, I will explain why I disagree with
this
 statement with relevant examples. Many
people
 follow the trend of online shopping. They like to buy
products
 from the Internet rather than visiting a departmental store. The main reasons might be it is very convenient to buy from the comfort of their home and they can choose from a range of
products
.
Moreover
, they can select between multiple alternative
products
 on the basis of their liking and/or affordability.
However
, traditional
shops
 will not shut down completely.
Shops
 are reliable and
people
 can choose
products
 by their hand.
For instance
,
people
 can purchase clothes by doing a trial and choosing fabric by their own hands so that they can buy the one which is comfortable, suits their body or is the best one.
This
types
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type
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 of feeling
give
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 immense pleasure and satisfaction to the customer.
Additionally
, shopping in a mall or a mart is a hobby for many, which gives happiness to them.
This
 experience cannot be fulfilled by online shopping. For some of them,
this
 is a type of therapy for anxiety and depression,
for example
. So I think there will always be a demand for physical stores no matter how trendy online shopping becomes. In conclusion, I believe that online shopping is increasing in popularity all over the world as it is convenient and
also
 the trend these days. But traditional
shops
 will not vanish from cities and villages because many
people
 find it necessary, entertaining, and/or therapeutic.
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