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The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relavant.

The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relavant.
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This
 given diagram illustrates how some bottles, which are made of
plastic
, often are recycled.
This
 is a man-made and cyclical
process
 that contains 9 dissimilar stages and will be started
immedately
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immediately
 after when somebody throws a used bottle away and those types of trash after passing all of
recycling
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 stages, again will be converted to new
plastic
 products. As soon as
,
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 somebody throws a useless bottle away and
abondens
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abandons
abandon
 it in
recycling
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the recycling
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 bin,
this
process
 will be started. In the subsequent stage, all of
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the rubish
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rubish
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rubbish
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 will be collected from different districts of the city and will be taken to recycling
centers
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centres
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. In those places, all of the
plastic
 bottles will be sorted by workers and some of them that are suitable for
recycling
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the recycling
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process
 will be separated and will be compacted into
the
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giant blocks of waste products. After that, the blocks will be crushed by some specific machines.
Following
this
, the crushed waste will be washed and
subsequently
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 they will be converted into
plastic
 pellets and
then
 those pellets will be warmed up by heating systems to produce raw material and
finally
those raw material
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that raw material
those raw materials
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 will be used to manufacture different
plostic
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plastic
 objects and
stuffs
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stuff
kinds of stuff
pieces of stuff
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 and those staffs again will be bought and used by consumers and
this
process
 will be started.
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