Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today's world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Today,
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of people believe that
subjects
,
such
as
Science
and
Technology
are much more important
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schools’ curriculum,
while
other individuals do not share
this
point of view. Both of these
subjects
are important
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but in
diffirent
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different
aspects. Supporters of the subject of history usually say that history repeats, so without knowing
past
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,
young
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generation will not be able to
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decent
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future
. From some aspect,
this
is true and was even proved in the past.
For instance
, when Mongol Empire was built by Chingiz Khan,
Chinese
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king did not see any threat in it,
however
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Chingiz-Khan almost destroyed his country, afterwards. Later, in
15th
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century, Uzbek-khan
had
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made the same mistake, when neglected Kazakh Khanate.
Although
, Kazakh-Khanate destroyed his country in
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century. What I mean is that those people had not been taking lessons from history,
therefore
, the consequences were disagreeable. Supporters of the second point of view,
on the other hand
, say that in today’s digital
ages
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Science
and
Technology
are the
subjects
of
future
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the future
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. It is useless to refuse, that these
subject
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subjects
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will affect people’s lives in the near
future
. Because, even today,
electronic
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revolution influenced all fields of people’s lives, starting from medicine and ending with aviation. The advance in
Technology
,
such
as
invention
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the invention
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of
robo-cleaners
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robot-cleaners
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and wash-dishers
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wash-dishers
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wash-dishes
are used in daily
lives
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life
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.
Also
,
range
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of diseases, which
was
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impossible to cure in the past, is cured now via
development
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of
Science
.
Moreover
, people now can get from one continent to another one on
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modern, improved planes, which are the outcome of Technologies, as well. In conclusion, all of these
subjects
are important for children’s development.
However
, I would agree that humanity’s
future
is behind
the
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Science
and
Technology
.
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  • crucial
  • comprehend
  • retrospect
  • gain insights
  • reflect on
  • sharpen
  • evaluate
  • significance
  • heritage
  • legacy
  • advent
  • breakthroughs
  • sustain
  • sustainability
  • revolutions
  • empowered
  • overcome
  • transform
  • advancements
  • collaboration
  • cooperation
  • diversity
  • fulfilling
  • promote
  • facilitate
  • prosperity
  • enhance
  • foster
  • foundation
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