The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the Uk, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the Uk, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.
The bar chart
compare
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the average number of
minutes
of telephone
communicates
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in three different categories in
UK
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the UK
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over 8 years.
Overall
, communicating with
local
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the local
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type
had the highest average of telephone calls.
In contrast
, the mobile
type
had
the
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negligible total
minutes
. To be precise, you can see that
Mobile
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the Mobile
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type
had risen trend
also
national
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the national
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and international
type
rise by a similar figure from just under 10 billion
minutes
to around 50 and from around 40
minutes
to a little more than 60 respectively during these 8 years.
For the
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most popular
types
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type
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of call
which
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is local lines you can see small rises
around
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15 billion
minutes
each year from 1995 to 1999.
However
,
this
type
of
communicating
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communication
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had fallen figure between 1999 to 2002 and it was about 90 billion
minutes
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number
  • minutes
  • telephone calls
  • UK
  • divided into
  • categories
  • from
  • to
  • overall
  • increased significantly
  • local fixed-line calls
  • accounted for
  • largest proportion
  • throughout
  • period
  • international calls
  • highest rate of growth
  • experiencing
  • sharp increase
  • national long-distance calls
  • remained relatively stable
  • slight decline
  • towards
  • end
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