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Some people prefer living in a house while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in an apartment?

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In
this
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 globalization era, property prices are getting higher and higher
due to
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 the increasing number of human beings. Some people prefer buying a
house
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while
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 others say they choose to live in an apartment. I will elaborate on why the advantages of owning properties outweigh its disadvantages,
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 some supporting experiences from Indonesian lifestyle misalnya Nowadays, living in a flat in a big city has some serious and undeniable drawbacks. It is said that there is a policy in some countries which does not allow the owner to use the flat forever.
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, if the convention states that the person who buys it is only allowed to utilize the flat for 80 years,
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 it can be only used for that duration of
time
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 even though it has been bought. In short, an apartment can not be lived in for a long
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 expense than an investment.
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, investing some money in a
house
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 can give many benefits.
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 the price for a
house
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 needs far more pennies, it is built on the ground, so, it has a growing value as
time
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 goes on.
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, if a person bought a
house
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 10 years ago for 2 million dollars, it would be worth 5 million dollars now.
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, inventing some resources in a
house
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 can give you a comfortable place to stay and generate back dollars that have been expended. In conclusion, paid apartments have several major flaws,
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 the short living
time
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,
while
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 the purchased building is able to multiply cash that has been invested. From the writing, I think there are more drawbacks than benefits
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 paying for an apartment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • privacy
  • outdoor activities
  • gardening
  • customization options
  • renovate
  • structural changes
  • investments
  • appreciation/depreciation
  • maintenance costs
  • utility costs
  • security features
  • gated entries
  • surveillance systems
  • shared amenities
  • community centers
  • suburban
  • rural areas
  • commutes
  • urban centers
  • public transport
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